A bit on the minimal side
Liking the sound of the lead. I was at first a bit put off by the lack of accompaniment (since the piece really isn't melodic) save the drums, but grew to enjoy the subtle variations within. The ending part felt a bit off since you suddenly introduced a harmonic line within the lead, but didn't really give it time to sink in before the piece stopped. Overall, still enjoyable though. Nice job.
Thanks for the review man. i agree, that parts not the greatest, i was trying to hard i guess. didnt turn out to good
Blues it is
Nice little piece you've got here. It kind of has a kind of generic blues feel to it, but I'm sure it can be fixed if you add a flowing ("improvised") melody line over it. My favorite parts are when the guitar part starts dropping bits of melody, though I wished they lasted longer. Good stuff, though.
Dramatic
You manage to keep a pretty dramatic mood throughout, which seems appropriate given the context. Musically, I'd liked to have seen a little bit more development (akin to what you've done to the theme in the ending section) - many of the variations are just transposed sections of the motif in the beginning with slight changes in instrumentation. But it's a solid piece of work, and one I could certainly imagine in a game. Nice job.
Thanks for the review and criticism.
What do you propose I should have done in the ending section? I tried to perhaps keep a familiar mood in the song, but I also tried to not be too repetitive, yet I believe I've failed on that subject. So should I have added a new melody or what? Of course, it's too late now, but it's always good to receive feedback from fellow musicians.
Feels more pop than classical, but w/e
I do like the overall sound and instrumentation, but the constant ostinato made this kinda feel like a one-trick pony. You add layers and depth on top of chords, but never really develop it - and it ends up kind feeling like (slight) variations on a four-bar progression. What you have right now works pretty good as a sort of chorus part, but I think you probably need to inject some different "lyrical" sections in between to make it feel like a full piece. So yeah, here's sometime to chew on :).
True, it was very repetitive, but ostinati are almost everywhere these days, and have deep roots in music going back to before time. But see, you're right about it sound more like pop music, and that is indeed due to the unchanging style of the song.
Perhaps if I added some vocals?
Expect a redo of this song later on.
Intro
I like the feel of this piece, but the light instrumentation and effects sort of made me just feel like it was just an extended intro section. I was sort of expecting the "real" piece to start near the end, with fuller instrumentation and harmony as well as a clearer recital of the poem. I don't dislike it, but at the same time it feels like you are trying to cram too much words into the music - which really don't vary enough to express the full range of feelings in the poem in my opinion. Still, it's not a bad attempt; the song really has distinct sound, and the overall idea is has quite sme potential.
Thanks for the review; I think that the song you're talking about would be a lot different than this one. I feel like I often stop at the point of greatest potential, and just look at what could be, instead of continuing - I feel like drawing this out, though, is unnecessary. Better to have a concentrated piece of what I want to put out there than to water it down with a stretched out structure and progression - plus, the music is meant to go with the poem, and once the poem is done - what, repeat it? The climax and end has happened, song done. I sort of like the way it turned out that the song is like a constant build up, an intro that doesn't let you down before it ends - catapults you into whatever you can. That's just the way it turned out - mabey this song is like a kid's drawing - nobody likes it but the kid, because it is his best expression of how he feels; this is my best attempt at expressing the way the poem made me feel, or how I felt then in my life - so when I hear it, I'm not just hearing it, but feeling my memories tied to it; so I'll always like to listen to this more than anyone else, because the language of this music is deeply personal to me.
Pretty neat
I rather liked how you used to voice to set the tone and pace of the music, though I think you could've done even more with it. The samples were really interesting too, but the distortion felt overdone - in the later parts, the mix felt so full with the constant distortion that it started sounding static; I think a slower build-up or alternating occasionally with "lighter" sections would've made the impact better. Overall though, this was fun piece to listen to though! So yay!
Really good point, that was my miss, but I found it a couple of weeks after closing this as a project.
I guess I should have re-arranged that part or at least, applied a good quantity of equalization. Depending on the player I choose, there's I chance I cant even get to hear that part.
Lacks a certain... impact?
The groove itself sounds alright, but the samples sound a bit too clean at parts and sort of lacks impact. I'm not a big fan of the orchestra hits in the intro, but the groove that starts around 1:00 sounds pretty tight (watch the distortion though). Try filtering and adding some other effects to the loop and see if can't get more... let's say "character" from the drum loop.
I'm bad at naming stuff, sorry
But I guess I can comment on your piece. The 30 or so seconds were really cool, what with the eerie strings and bells and 3d panning sweeps. But after that it rather suddenly start sounding like essentially a classical piece with ambient instruments and stuff. Not that it's bad or anything, but it certainly my a drop from the anticipation built by the intro - and you pretty much never go back to that style again, leaving it sounding like almost like an fortunate accident. I'm almost inclined to suggest you drop the intro altogether because of the wide gap in between stylistically. But still, it's definitely my favorite part of this four and half-minute piece.
You know, you're completely right about the style change. I was essentially trying to compose a classical style piece with ambient timbres and you may have noticed I tried to tie it all up with the more sci fi sounds at the end. Ah well. Thanks for the comments:)
So I hear...
Well, I can sort of hear the rhythmic flow of the song, but it's pretty hard to make it out tonally because of the recording quality (pretty much I could only hear the drums somewhat clearly). I do like the fact that you have these alternating faster and slower sections, though the transitions between them feel a bit abrupt. So yeah, some interesting stuff I guess, but that's about all I can make out, sorry.
Thanks for your review :). Yup, it's kind of hard to make stuff out, it's all down to the way we recorded it I reckon.
Boredom makes you creative?
This is a pretty cool sounding piece. I don't know what the original sounded like, but there's some really nice sound effects in this one. The riff still sounds like it keeps much of its softeness after the distortion, which combines to into a rather complex sounding instrument (or mesh of, if there were other instruments playing along in unison). I also liked the other strange synth part (sort of like animal sounds), which helped to serve as a nice alternative to the rhymthic chordal instrument. Only thing that I didn't quite like were the drums - they sounded kind of too seperated from the mix, and doesn't quite have as much character as the other instruments. But it's ok I guess.
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