More bass?
I'm liking the drum grooves and effects and all, but the bass range of this piece was really quiet. It was cool for the first part where you had that gradual build-up , but the climax was pretty disappoint because of the weak levels. Try boosting the bass levels/eqing/compressing the mix somewhat to bring out the bass (both in the drums and the bass instruments themselves).
Warm sounds
You've got a pretty good (albeit a bit cliched) progression here and you certainly don't hesistate to exploit it. Piano has a neat mysterious flow to it (though that little stutter near 1:19 was really noticable), and the strings were alright too. I was kind of hoping for a more contrasting section outside of the 4-chord progression that pervades the entire piece, but I guess it's not completely necessary. Anyways, good job on this.
Thanks for the response. The reason I didn't move outside that 4-chord progression is because it was the soundtrack to a video. I think I might make another version that moves outside that progression because I really like how this turned out :)
Nice take on theme
You've got a nice variety to the variations off theme - kept me constantly on my feet and interested. Only advice would be to mix the melody (ie, the guitar) a bit louder in comparison with everything else, since the it is the highlight of the piece. Good stuff, though; really full-fledged remix that you don't see much around these parts. Very nice work.
Much love!
Also, the guitar was too soft for you? I think it carried the song well enough. It certain parts it does indeed fade into the background, but the 'new stuff' was supposed to take over from there. Or was it too soft in the main sections as well? If you can get back to me on that (PM) I'd really appreciate it. <3
Thanks again!
Pretty neat
It took a bit for it to me to get a good feel for this piece, but once I did I found it pretty enjoyable. The instruments have a sort of lo-fi, retro feel to them, but they fit well together. I wasn't a big fan of the drums, though - their sound the mix (especially sampled loops) made it stand out too much, and consequently kind of left an uncomfortable void when they dropped out. And it also kind of left me with the sensation that the entire piece was a sort of intro section building up into main body of the piece, but it ends before it really gets going. Maybe it's just me, though.
Thanks. Gotta say tho, while the drums are looped, they're not sampled, I made them myself.
Sounds about right
I like the mood in this piece - it has a sort of nostalgic feel, a desire for slower and simpler times. That said, I think the celesta or whatever bell like instrument needs to be changed - it's a bit too bright and ringy for the mood of the piece, and just a bit grating on the ears. You can probably even do without it altogether and still have a solid piece.
Good job on this though.
In retrospect, the bell section is superfluous at best, altogether detrimental to the piece at worst, so it's out. You have quite the ear-- those are precisely the feelings I was going for, the ones which wash over me so often. A tad dramatic, but any other phrasing would not quite cut it. Whatever it is.
Anyway, thanks for the critique, and your sympathy. I'm changing it up in a bit so I can finally be pleased with it.
Kind of reminds me of Sound Horizon
The melodic feel and storytelling aspect reminds me a bit of Sound Horizon, but without so much of the melodrama. Singing sounds very nice, and it's nice to see harmony vocals too. All in all, a very good start. Great job!
Good stuff
I thought this was pretty interesting piece, and while it's a bit repetitive, it's not to the level where you start getting bored of it. And if you add on the vocals, it should round that part off well too. Has a sorta video game feel to it with the instruments and melody, but in a good way. Good stuff.
Interesting
The guitar pattern was a bit repeptitive, but I liked how it was developing gradually. Also quite liked the mellow vocal chords - they really help add some depth to the piece (in terms of "fullness" of the sound). Interesting bit with the tapping too, though I didn't like the clicky sound that persists throughout the piece. Overall, it sounds like a pretty neat experiment, and I hope you can used what you tried here in a full scale piece in the future.
Nice piece, though the strings feel a bit sporadic
I like the overall calm feeling of the piece, but the strings sort of ruin it a bit for me. I think the attack on them is too high at time and a number of the notes sound like they are played with sforzando - and end up sort of sounding a bit awkward as a result. As for the piece itself, I think a little bit more variety in the harp part would've been welcome - even if it's just letting rest a couple of measures here and there. Overall, it's a nice piece though, and does fit the theme too for the most part. Good job.
hey thanks for the criticism man! i see what you mean with the strings- i dont know about lowering their attack time during parts, i like how they tend to smooth in. this was my second track made when I got the program (East West Symphony), so I wasn't too familiar with the controls. (to be honest, i didnt know about manipulation at the time much at all), but there definetly could be more variation in techniques and keyswitching (if I'm using the right term here) through out. as for the harp- i went back today and modified the chord structure throughout, so it was even more repetitive before. maybe more drastic changes are needed.
well, thanks for the good score, and helpful review! I'll take your points when I make my next piece!
Very chill
I found this piece very melodically pleasing, even though the melody is a somewhat subtle; has a pretty hypnotic feel, too. Sometimes it felt a bit too dense for my taste, but overall the flow's pretty good. Also liked how you started changing the feel of the piece near the end - wish that section would've lasted a bit longer for it to sink in though. All in all, I'd say this experiment is a success. Good job!
Yeah, probably would have been interesting/better if I expanded on the last section.
Thanks for the review :)
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